I really like this story so far, the only negative thing is that it's moving quickly and I'm getting confused with some of the point of views in each chapter. Other than that, great story!(:
Alright, the comment swap brought me here, and I have to admit I have no idea what band these guys are from to be honest with you. Anyway, your writing is pretty decent, and I feel like this story could have a lot of potential once you get the ball rolling. Your grammar is very nice, and you don't have a problem with spelling (which is amazing. A lot of fanfics have sub-par spelling ><). Anyway, keep up the great work with this and I'm sure you'll have something fantastic!