The Doll Maker - Comments

I'm hooked I love how it started and I just love where it's heading :)

Creepy, but I'm snug on your web. Keep spinning Madame Spider.

Ok, this one ran chills down my spine... freaky! She is so obsessed!! *Recommend--already!*

I think this -- "Now a lot of stories begin with 'You may have heard a story that started with 'once upon a time, and this is one such as that.. This story is a once upon a time. About a family that wanted a baby. But it is not the tale of Thumbling. This story takes place in a little house not too far from yours." belongs in the summary. Makes for a better read. However I do like the idea and I just might continue to read your story.

I really like this idea! I thought it was pretty well written, but you have a few grammar/spelling mistakes, so I would just suggest that you re-read once or twice. But yeah... totally subscribing! Update soon! :)

This looks promising, I'm intrigued at your idea and the character's desperation you descried really nicely; I could feel that they were going crazy (especially that Mrs Doyle...) But I think it is pretty speedy here, but I'm assuming it's to get the introduction-like parts out of the way and write the story into five chapters (introductions are always the hardest)

the background also sets off the creepy mood for the reader... All I can say is good luck! :) for the contest and the writing! Looking forward to the next chapters! :)