Shades of Moons - Comments

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I really love this. Your writing style is very simple and unembellished, for the most part, but it conveys as much in a few words as some stories convey in thousands. The siblings' characterizations are all nuanced and subtle, which I appreciate a lot, and I adore how you've woven their narratives together. Keep up the good work! I've subscribed.

First of all I would like to say that your use of imagery and descriptive language is simply breathtaking. I feel as if this story challenges real issues in beautiful and very well written manner. Although your chapters are a little shorter than what I'm used to, they hold the same amount of content as longer ones. Your layout is gorgeous, but it doesn't draw away from the story. Although I'm not normally into this genre, you have yourself a new subscriber, keep up the great work darling.

Wow! this is such an amazing story! You really know how to write! You create such interesting characters that drew me in straight away. I love the way you let conversation flow, one thing I find near impossible! I absolutely ADORE your layout too. You have definitely put a lot of thought into this story, and it has paid off. Well done!

[comment swap] Okay, so honest opinion. Loved it. You have a wonderful narrative, your voice is strong and unique. You have a well-rounded vocabulary and your grammar is lovely. You could defiantly have a career in writing, you should pursue it if you haven't already. Keep up the great work!

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the way you write is perrrfect. ive been waiting for comment swap to work and to give me an amazing story. i absoluetly lovee this story at firsti thought it was literally going to be about moons so i was like ehh. that sounds completely stupid now. i love how your writing just drizzles like honey, effortlessly and with grace. spelling and grammar is perfect. i cant believe how amazing that is. uh im in love

And I'm sure it 's all going to go bad next chapter, am I right?

Comment swap brought me here, and I'm happy it did!

I loooooove your writing style. Also I think it's kinda cool how the main character's nicknames are just the first letters of their names. I love their names as well and your layout!! It's so pretty and simple and cute!! Great story, I haven't finished reading, but I'm going to continue reading.
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[comment swap] I love this. I only got here because of the comment swap and I'm glad I did so. This is an amazing thought out story. I love the back ground and the banner. Your grammar is good too. I can tell that you put a lot of .thought into this story. It shows!

[comment swap] Okay, so honest opinion. Loved it. You have a wonderful narrative, your voice is strong and unique. You have a well-rounded vocabulary and your grammar is lovely. You could defiantly have a career in writing, you should pursue it if you haven't already. Keep up the great work!

I'm loving this. Europa is probably my favorite because she is most like me. :D As for a plot twist I'm not sure. Maybe one of callisto's friends that is interested in europa should go too far and try something, bringing out callisto's overprotective brother side. Because I haven't seen much of that.
Anyway, love the story :)

I just love this, don't you dare give up. XD

Unfortunately, this is going to be a short comment.

This story was great! I love the names, it make the characters easier to remember when they have unusual names. I like your description. You've portrayed the characters relationships really well. It all just fits. I really like it, I can't find any faults at all, so I really don't know what else to say. Can't wait to read the rest!

I really love the names of the characters! They're such interesting but pretty names.
I also like you writing style, and I absolutely love the layout!
I really love all of the characters, they all really have their own little personalities and fit well together as well. I think Europa will end up being my favourite!
I can't really fault anything in the story, congrats! :)

From the comment swap, and I'm going to make this short and sweet for a few reasons.

First off I must say I really love this story, I like the idea of having the siblings be named after the moons and such. Though the comment below is correct about their order, I see how you lined them up by height should that be fine.

Also reading I notice each of the characters seem to reflect the different typical high school students, Io is the quiet tough guy in all the lower classes, Callisto is the high school jock, Ganymede is the girl that falls in love and makes one mistake and becomes pregnant, and Europa is the sweet innocent girl that seems to never do anything bad but yet gets picked on with false accusations.

This story is very good grammar and spelling wise, there's not much I can say about that.

Now for the reason this short and sweet compared to other comment swaps I write, it's because I can't find anything at wrong here, I love the story, and you my friend have a subscriber.

I don't know if you actually looked closely at what Jupiter's moons are like beyond their order, but I love how Io the character fits so well with Io the volcanic moon. I didn't go read the other chapters, but if they're anything like the first then my nerd side approves!

I think you have a great writing style and I love how you've presented your characters very clearly. I can't quite tell from the summary where you'll be going with this story though. Obviously if you have so many chapters, then you've got a plan for it. But just from the summary us readers can't quite see that.

Finally, I really thought you described the actions the characters are taking very well - I could really imagine them doing the things you said they were doing! But I didn't get a good idea of what the setting description was. What did the arena look like? Was it grungy? Was it just a hole the fans made or was there an actual stage or cage? What was the common appearance of all the people in the crowd? What did the room smell like?

Add a few details like that and you'll have an awesome story

I'm here from the land of Comment Swap, and I'm so glad it sent me here because I LOVE this. I really want to find out what happens next. It's really cool how you named the four kids after moons. Is there some kind of connection with that, or is that just what they're named? Keep writing, dear. I can't wait to read more. Recommended and subscribed!

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So, I love literally everything about this. The title and layout are both beautiful; I'm tempted to ask you to make a layout for me. XD I didn't read the whole thing because it's really late and my eyes are starting to blur staring at the screen, but I'm definitely going to be coming back to read the rest soon, because this is beautifully written and I love the uniqueness of this story. Awesome job!

It's interesting in a way of personification... I loved the characters (the moons) whom I can relate to... Esp. Io and Callisto... I liked it even when I read the summary... I have a feeling that its good...

Love it! Love that they have all different personalities and that they blend together so well. Your writing is amazing and joey is also my favourite along with Lo. Keep up the great work! :)

This is a really cool idea and I love all your characters, though I'd have to say Europa and Callisto are probably my favorites (I know, weird combination) but Europa is just so cute, especially how she has that crush on joey.