August 9th, 2012 at 10:21am
I had no intention of reading all five chapters, but given how nicely sized they were, and just how well you write it was impossible to stop.
You paint such a vivid, interesting picture of each of the siblings, with their own issues, and separate distinctive personalities. It makes it so you remember each of them on their own, not as a jumbled compilation of siblings. This just works, it works so very well for you and your story. I'm partial to Io and Europa thus far, just because they seem to share the best relationship and it really lends to their characters.
Also, your layout is just phenomenal. Best of luck with this!
You did have a few punctuation and grammar mistakes. But they can easily be fixed if you edit a little! So they are really nothing major.
Other than that I don't really know what to say. You definitely caught my attention after the first chapter, that's for sure! You had just the right amount description within your writing too.
Keep up the good work!