This story brought to you by comment swap. Anyway, I really like this story, and your writing style makes it a quick read (a good thing, mind you! I like quick reads.) I hope to see more of Jimmy honestly. He's like the comedic relief... Chaplin or Groucho Marx. He'll be awesome xD I can already feel the hate/sexual tension. Subscribing! Super excited to see where you go with this!!
Found this story through comment swap. I think you've got a great writing style and a knack for detail. But I have no idea what this story is really going to be about, except for two kids who hare each other. I also am not familiar with the characters and you should really spend more time describing them in either the intro or in the first chapter so we can really get a feel for the characters.