The Station - Part I - Comments

Comment Swap brought me here. I read the summary and the first chapter. Your summary was perfect and drew me in completely. Good Job. The first chapter is good as well. Madeline is a very strong character. Everything is very detailed which is perfect as well. 9/10

Dear author, the comment swap thingy brought me here and even though I don't like reading stories based on the future but more about now and the past centuries, I can say it was a good read. I read your summary and author's not but this doesn't feel like a oneshot or a series. Just turn it to a chaptered story. As for what you said about the layout, you can use a layout made with no pictures and before your chapters you could use bb codes { [img]photo's link[/img] } and there would be no problem. It's that simple. Just a thought though, its your choice what you'll do. I just told you what I would have done. As for your writing skills, they showed up perfectly. I liked your descriptions even though I wanted to read a bit of a dialogue seeing it as a oneshot cause if it was a chaptered story, I would take it as prologue. That's all from me so bye. ~Marian.

Dear author, the comment swap thingy brought me here and even though I don't like reading stories based on the future but more about now and the past centuries, I can say it was a good read. I read your summary and author's not but this doesn't feel like a oneshot or a series. Just turn it to a chaptered story. As for what you said about the layout, you can use a layout made with no pictures and before your chapters you could use bb codes { [img]photo's link[/img] } and there would be no problem. It's that simple. Just a thought though, its your choice what you'll do. I just told you what I would have done. As for your writing skills, they showed up perfectly. I liked your descriptions even though I wanted to read a bit of a dialogue seeing it as a oneshot cause if it was a chaptered story, I would take it as prologue. That's all from me so bye. ~Marian.

So i've just been given this story from comment swap, even though i've already commented on it, which is strange haha! So yeah i've re-read it and I think it's even better than the first time I read it! Your simple descriptions suit the story so well, such as "a pair of worn-out jeans, and a black baseball cap sat reversed on her head" it just sets the scene & character wonderfully :)

Thanks for the feedback everyone! :D I'm wholeheartedly working on this series for you guys! Check out part two if you haven't already!

(I also wanted to say that the artwork is beautiful and really suits your story, so well done to whoever created it!)

I love this new idea you have! It's so innovative, and your descriptions are very detailed. I love the idea of the war, and Madeline is a very strong character. Well done so far :)

From Comment Swap~

The comment swap feature has us up again, haha. I wish it would’ve given me this part first, so I didn’t sound like an idiot when commenting on the second part first, but no big deal. I’m excited to start reading this and find out the beginning of Madeline Lopez’s story (:

I really like what you’ve done with this story. I really do. You have a fresh, innovative idea that has completely captivated me. I like your descriptions of everything – the makeshift shelter, the calendar, Madeline’s room, Old Man Harris, all of it. You describe them perfectly, without giving too much away and without holding anything back. I’m curious to find out more about this war that went on and what this shelter in Minnesota holds for the survivors of this war. I absolutely love the ever-thickening plot of this.

I really hope you’ll post the third part of this soon, so we can find out entirely what went on with all of this. You’ve done an absolutely brilliant job with this idea so far. Awesome job! c:

Woooooow. All I can say is I am happily surprised that this is well-written! Dang! Your word choice and diction flow smoothly, and the story itself is great! I usually do comment swaps and find myself forced to read dredge, but this was a pleasant surprise, as I said before. :-) Hope you keep writing this series!

Yes, I'm actually currently working on the next story right now. It's still mostly in the planning phase, but I expect to have it finished in the next few days. I really appreciate having some feedback!

And the artist for the chapter's banner artwork is JoakinOlofsson on deviantart. Here's a link to his profile, he's got some great landscape work. http://joakimolofsson.deviantart.com/

By the way, I like the character of Madeline and would be interested to read more of her outings as a character. Will you be writing more for 'The Aftermath Series' before too long? Also what is the name of the artist who did the train artwork on the chapter? I really like it.

I found this really individual and unique, and the layout compliments the writing really well. I liked your writing style and also the idea of the story. Nice one :)