You use a lot of decriptive writing which I like. It really paints a picture though sometimes I feel like you use to much and it doesn't always flow. I picked up a few Grammer errors and sometimes had to re read a sentence for it to make complete sense to me. One thing that bugs me when she wakes up in the hospital that she instantly puts together that she had no memory, I feel having worked in a hospital for a while it's not something someone puts together when they have memory gaps.
March 14th, 2022 at 12:12pm