Eternally Yours - Comments

More. More. More!!! Please?

Is Gabe Andrew?? Ôó and Riley.. Is he like Andrews enternal enemy?? :D

Did you know that it's actually impossible for your subconscious mind to make up faces if you haven't actually seen them before? So logically, it's impossible for Sienna to be dreaming of Claire and Andrew. Just putting that out there. But since this is fictional, the laws of nature don't exist.

I feel as though I don't understand Andrew's stance on his predicament with Claire. He doesn't have the resolve to just keep walking away when he does the first time, but he can stay away from her for twelve days while he knows that someone or something is going to make her suffer more than he is. I just am confused about his character.

Your writing is very odd. Your grammar is all correct and you have no spelling errors so far, but your characters emotions and their surroundings are so empty. The only time I feel that your Sienna especially showed any emotion other than boredom is when she was on the phone with Riley. You should think about that.

Sienna doesn't seem nearly as flustered by Riley in person as she was on the phone. I don't understand. The plot is good, semi-original. Keep writing. I encourage it.

Very intresting. I have read a story like this before and I absoultely loved it, so i'm looking forward to seeing where this goes! Update soon!

Hello there :)

Basically the main story of your idea, which if I got correctly is a boy and a girl always get together in a relationship but the girl ends up dying, is the same as Lauren Kate's novel ''fallen'' started.

I'm really confused with what I just read. The fact I have many questions that needs answers makes it all the more interestign but some things are better if you explained them a little bit.

Keep up the great work. ^^

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"frame"? just doesn't quite feel like the right word to me.
I'd love to see samples, not just named, but in actual experience, explaining, demonstrating exactlöy how and why they failed.
The rules mentioned, are they expressed, or will they be expressed? Just mentioning that they're there, only makes it frustrating.
What's his original mistake, that was mentioned?
Did she die in the end of the chapter?
If you've living up to the title, this storry can never end.

I'm not sure if I got it correctly... So the boy and girl always get together as a couple and the girl ends up dying.. But why exactly? Ôó how did that happen? And how old must the man be?? And does the girl always forget about him??

Dear Fellow Comment Swapper,

Subscribed and Recommended!!! I find your story very, very interesting. I think you should definitely keep going! Personally, I haven't found anything wrong with your story. I would like to see you proceed with many more chapters and lots more reading fun!

-K