August 4th, 2012 at 02:18pm
Hellooo from Comment Swap.
This is the first time I stumble across a story about a werewolf, and it's really an awesome idea. The story was really good, although I have to say some of it was hard to understand and I thought a lot of it was cloudy, because of the way you wrote it. Not because you're not a good writer because you are, I just think so thoughts aren't displayed clearly. Also, it gets confusing when the first chapter is completely in first person P.O.V and the second variates from first and third. You should try to stick to one, it makes reading it a lot simpler. Other than that though, great job!
This is the first time I stumble across a story about a werewolf, and it's really an awesome idea. The story was really good, although I have to say some of it was hard to understand and I thought a lot of it was cloudy, because of the way you wrote it. Not because you're not a good writer because you are, I just think so thoughts aren't displayed clearly. Also, it gets confusing when the first chapter is completely in first person P.O.V and the second variates from first and third. You should try to stick to one, it makes reading it a lot simpler. Other than that though, great job!