Daydream Away - Comments

  • bbasium

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    this is my favorite fic ever and it just breaks my heart every time and I just love everything about this. good job :)
    January 31st, 2013 at 11:23pm
  • let me go.

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    First, I like the summary. I feel that it draws the reader fairly quickly. I also enjoyed the flow of the story. I felt that it was worded really well, particularly the dialogue. The dialogue between Josh and Dan sounded very realistic. The end of this was really bittersweet. I was happy that Josh remembered what happened, but really disappointed that nothing else could happen between them. I think the ending really enhanced the story as a whole, though. The only con-crit I have is that you proofread this a little more thoroughly as there are some grammatical mistakes and typos. Good job with this though.
    December 27th, 2012 at 06:17am
  • Kira Yukimura

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    This is amazing. Agh I love it!
    August 8th, 2012 at 04:40pm
  • livetodance

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    your writing is incredible. i love how each verse of the song has its own section of the story, like a little mini chapter. even though i've never listened to All Time Low before, i would say this is a really great (yet sad!) story, excellently written. it is beautiful.
    August 6th, 2012 at 09:54am
  • livetodance

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    you write incredibly well! i love how you put a verse between each section, like a little mini chapter. this is a great story, even though i haven't listened to All Time Low before. beautiful story:)
    August 6th, 2012 at 09:43am
  • liv-wat-up

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    this is ridiculously cute!
    August 4th, 2012 at 08:28pm
  • chloeanneeee

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    Thank you very much! I'm planning on doing a chaptered flintceschi fiction, which will (hopefully) have a happy ending :)
    August 4th, 2012 at 12:09am
  • JinxxCyanide

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    Argh! Why are your fics so brilliant, yet so frustrating! No-one has a happy ending! Poor Dan, poor Josh.....:( It was really good, though.
    August 3rd, 2012 at 09:43pm