Cheated - Comments

CS sent me! :)
first of all, I really like your layout. it's a bummer that you can't read the story in that set up! I think if you went back into the settings and fixed it, it would be very possible. I've had the same thing happen with one of my stories. I think it has to do with line height. and very fixable!

anyway, on to your story. I really like this. you illustrate a broken relationship due to cheating in a really realistic way. I personally am very morally opposed to cheating so this was hard for me to read, but I still like your writing. the last line in particular was very powerful.

CS: Wow wow wow wow wow D: I love how your writing is formatted into long paragraphs and then short, impactful one-liners. It's powerful, and difficult to pull off but you do so flawlessly c: and I adore the last line; it really made me think. Huh, that doesn't happen that often LOL, you must be a really good writer c: I enjoyed this!

I really liked this. The way it is set out makes it seem dis-jointed which actually works really well and makes it seem very realistic. Your short sentences were very powerful and drew you out of the writing to really think about what's going on
Well done :D

So I thought that your story is really good. Well written and organized, also your characters are well described something that I can’t do with mine. I always have trouble on this. Keep up the great writing and also if you have any writing tips I would appreciate it.

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Comment Swap.
So I thought that your story is really good. Well written and organized, also your characters are well described something that I can’t do with mine. I always have trouble on this. Keep up the great writing and also if you have any writing tips I would appreciate it.

Comment Swap.
So I thought that your story is really good. Well written and organized, also your characters are well described something that I can’t do with mine. I always have trouble on this. Keep up the great writing and also if you have any writing tips I would appreciate it.

Comment swap sent me here. This is an interesting little bit of story. :) I like your description and the portrayal of the emotion. :D I also like how the chapter shows a picture, one little bit of time and the emotion therein. It makes it really interesting. The emotions seem very realistic. I'd imagine that is how someone would most likely feel if they cheated on someone who truly loved them. :)