Survivor - Comments

Really good

I know you don't think the boys could be that mean but I like that they were mean and felt horrible for what they had done to their step-mother. I think it's nice how danny tries to comfort her after the whole loss.

winner will be posted in 20
-S

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I'm going to have to agree with Hello Cold World down there, I have no idea what this is about. But that fact really doesn't take away from the story, I can still appreciate the detail and the amount of emotion that you've put into this. Your grammar and spelling are perfect, and the plot is already flowing brilliantly. Keep up the good work!

Yeah I didn't really understand the characters in this and it did say it was a fan fiction and all, so obviously I'm just not a part of this fandom, I'm afraid.

It was very well written and there weren't any mistakes that I picked up on, so well done. Keep up the good work.

I loved it! Of course it was so sad that Olivia lost the baby, but Danny and her could make it through together. I love to read your writing and I am glad to have you as my awesome co-author because you make our story great!