I really like what you have going on here but there are a few things i would fix.
It get's hard to read sometimes because of the no space between paragraphs and also when you have multiple people speaking with out saying who said what gets confusing. I know it seems like everyone should know who said what but we don't. When those little details get straightened out i'm sure it will be even better because i like this i just spend half of my time confused and trying to figure out what's going on.
Over all i love that she's playing the best friend card, but she is also falling for him. Sometimes i want to know more about her, like is she black from that comment i got confused because i never really got a description of her.
It get's hard to read sometimes because of the no space between paragraphs and also when you have multiple people speaking with out saying who said what gets confusing. I know it seems like everyone should know who said what but we don't. When those little details get straightened out i'm sure it will be even better because i like this i just spend half of my time confused and trying to figure out what's going on.
Over all i love that she's playing the best friend card, but she is also falling for him. Sometimes i want to know more about her, like is she black from that comment i got confused because i never really got a description of her.