Desperate for Air - Comments

Oh my god I don't think I have ever read anything more cute!! Just the word hiccup by itself anyway but this whole story just aw. I read this about five times through and each time it just got better, your use of sentence structure is great and really adds to the drabble which is important when you dont have that many words, gah i just love this

This is adorable! I agree with the authoress. The way this flows like a breeze is refreshing. Also the narrator's personalty and setting are mentioned which is nice, and helps ground the story.

I can see why you used the c: smile rather than something less smily like (:

That is so cute! Its light and airy and sweet :D She seems so fazed by him it's adorable
Nice work!