Dying Inside - Comments

@ a walking travesty;
Thank you for your honesty. I'm not proud of this story by any means. I wrote what is on here like two years ago... Lol, my writing ability has definitely changed.

Comment swap!
I was biased going into this because I do not like Avenged Sevenfold, and like reading about them even less, but I'll try not to let it effect my opinion on the story.
My first impression was that the layout was very difficult to read and the summary gave out a lot of information. I felt like I knew too much before I even began to read it.
That being said, there were quite a few grammatical/spelling errors that were distracting. If you have trouble with things like that, you can always get a beta who will proofread things for you.
As for the story itself, it seems a bit cliched, but there are some moments of originality.
I think that with a little bit of work, this story could be made into something great. Good luck and keep on writing.

I can't believe she didn't let Brian in the room for the delivery! I personally think she needs to give him a chance...
Can't wait for the next update:)

Jesse kinda annoys me.

Brian and lex ! Jesse is to clingy.

i want brian and lex together, jesse is being a jerk!!

In your face, Brian! hah! Can't wait for more.

hope Brian helps cant wait for the next chapter

I'm from the comment swap. So I read the first chapter. I don't really know anything about this band, but this story seems very cliche to me. I dunno. You write very well though. I kind of hate how I already know that she gets pregnant from just reading the summary - and the fact that he didn't use a condom. The way she was so calm about the one night stand makes me think that she's on BC but then, the summary. Good luck darling! & keep up the good work

she really needs to tell Brian :/

More soon please?

loveeeeee it