October 11th, 2013 at 06:28pm
Comment swap!
I was biased going into this because I do not like Avenged Sevenfold, and like reading about them even less, but I'll try not to let it effect my opinion on the story.
My first impression was that the layout was very difficult to read and the summary gave out a lot of information. I felt like I knew too much before I even began to read it.
That being said, there were quite a few grammatical/spelling errors that were distracting. If you have trouble with things like that, you can always get a beta who will proofread things for you.
As for the story itself, it seems a bit cliched, but there are some moments of originality.
I think that with a little bit of work, this story could be made into something great. Good luck and keep on writing.
Thank you for your honesty. I'm not proud of this story by any means. I wrote what is on here like two years ago... Lol, my writing ability has definitely changed.