White Lilies - Comments

I really love how everything between the two characters are completely natural and flow together. In a lot of stories I read conversation and actions are a bit forced. You can truly tell that these two love each other :).

I didn't know that white lilies were funeral flowers but now it all makes sense. I can't believe you managed to break my heart in just a few short paragraphs but you definitely did. You can feel all the emotions expressed through this story and I can't feel more bad for her.

This was such an amazing drabble that I adored. You have no grammar or spelling mistakes at all and you are a wonderful writer !

Wow, this drabble really packed a lot of emotions that I did not think I would have to experience while reading, hahaha. I was a bit confused, but then I got it eventually. I like that I was confused, because there was an air of mystery about the piece that I liked.

Nothing about this piece was forced, it was just a nice little genuine drabble and I thought that was great. You created a simple story with simple characters and that's wonderful, you know? The characters had a cute relationship and I have to say while reading you definitely want the best for them. I think this was great. :)

This drabble; I really loved this drabble. You really had me worrying because I thought that he was really gone... Which means that I was very happy that she was just dreaming. The emotions that were written in this drabble were fantastic, and I couldn't help but feel them while I was reading this.

What I like about this is how you didn't put her dream in italics. I often see that in stories, the authors will make sure the reader knows that a certain part of the story is a dream and/ or a flashback, but in this drabble, you didn't. I think it really added to the drabble as a whole because the reader found out that she was dreaming at the very end, after having a heart attack from finding out that her boyfriend had passed away. Anyway, amazing work!

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Besides the fact that the summary keeps you wondering what is going to happen next. This was beautiful. But me, thinking something really bad was going to happen because of the white lilies are funeral flowers. Like maybe he was to kill her or something? I don't know lol. Sorry I'm crazy. ^__^

This was amazing. beautifuly written. You have so much talent.

I really like that way you right. This was really interesting! And also horribly sad...

Comment for A Thousand Little Kisses Contest:

Title: It's very pretty and simple. I dig.

Layout: Simplistic, but fitting and again--pretty.

The Story: AHHHHHH IT'S SO BEAUTIFUL. Barf. Okay. I'm calm. Your interpretation of the word was so lovely. I was expecting something cute at first and then all of a sudden it gets serious and it's kind of devastating with how fast it changed, and then--oh, the symbolism. That's my favorite part. It's so great. It's deep, dude.

Extra Stuff: In future writing, maybe spice up your sentence structure. The first few lines were all laid out the same and you may want to take a little variety into consideration.

Great job! Thanks for entering and good luck!

I really hope to find out more about this- I like the Arabic definition and I also like that the sentences sort of flow together- it makes it seem like she understands and yet doesn't understand at the same time, and I really enjoy it. It helps make me feel the same way.

Anyway, you've got a lot of potential here and I hope you continue. (:

This is really cute. I'm going to guess they are married, which is so lovely. And having the Arabic word described in the start was really unique.

The middle was quite horrifying, which was probably the plan, though the lack of setting made the whole piece a little floating. I floated off in the imaginative space of the story before you mentioned the flower again.

Good luck in writing on. :)