August 12th, 2012 at 04:55pm
Comment swap sent me here.
Firstly I adore the layout. It's just so cute and I love the colours you've used, so well done on that! I assume the guy on the banner is from Avenged Sevenfold, of whom I'm not a big fan, so I wouldn't usually have chosen this to read.
I love how you have the story starting off with the dog. I have a black Labrador myself, and I think you've written the wee dog's excitement so well. I can almost imagine him bounding around on the beach. Again, when you write in Bella, I can imagine it perfectly. The idea of having two people meet whilst walking their dogs isn't something I've seen before, so well done on having such an original idea! I also love how you've written Matt almost as an original character, because that's my main issue with most A7X fanfics where they rely on the reader knowing exactly who they are. I also completely love the fact that you've had them meeting, them being at a party, and then later on, being marred. It's a really cute concept!
The only grammar error I could see was "Tom isn't quite have", which should be "Tom doesn't quite have", and I didn't pick up on any spelling errors at all, so really well done. I absolutely love this little story, and I'm really glad comment swap directed me this way, because I wouldn't have read it otherwise. Keep up the good work! :)
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IT WAS FANTASTIC, OH MY GODDDDDD. I WISH I WOULD OF READ THIS SOONER BUT OH MY GODDDDDDDD. :D