Into Sparks - Comments

That was really interesting and not the ending I would've expected. It was a really nice twist to it. You have a nice way of describing the details as well, especially with the scene on the coast at night.

Man, I wish Ally and Jack could just be together. You are quite the talented writer and truly helped the story develop, yet there was enough mystery where I'm just like, "Damn. I want to know more." I wish this story could continue, but not everything has an ending I guess.

Great entry and good luck in the contest!

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You are an amazing writer/storyteller. I loved the story and it really matched the song well. I like how you took it out of context and made it all your own. Great job. :)

This is incredible. I love your style and I really like the idea of it all. I especially enjoy that they aren't pressuring themselves into an unrealistic friendship like you so commonly see around here. That's probably my favorite thing about this- it's so real, grounded.

Thanks for writing it, thanks for putting it in comment swap so I could experience it.

I like her and find it kind of sad, but sweet. Bittersweet I guess.

I'm... surprised by this. I believe that's the word I want to use. The first chapter her comfort around him kind of threw me for a loop, and I wasn't sure if I liked it or not, but by the time I finished the second chapter, I was hooked. This is good, really really good. And different from anything I've read here. It's very intriguing. I like the idea of these two people, different in age and lifestyles, being so intertwined. He's married, she's... so young. You've painted a pretty picture with this story. Definitely subscribing and reccing.

Ally is an amusing character. I like her, the calmness she experienced during her first meeting with him actually intrigued me after I finished reading what of the story you had up. It's a really fresh, not-forced take. I'm truly impressed by your writing, I didn't find any grammar or spelling errors. I'd have given you a heads up if I did. Good luck with this story!

I honestly thought that they were going to get together in the end but they didn't and that's what makes it so incredibly special. This story was written beautifully and was just so incredible and amazing. Just. Wow.

Omg! Comment swap has brought me here and i have to say that this story is so cute and simple i just want to read more. After reading a paragraph i'm excited to see the next one :P I cant wait to read more update soon! This story is very unique<3 and the writing just pulls you into loving it!

Sorry, did that twice lol :p

I love this idea. I find it so cute the idea of meeting someone over and over again randomly, and I love ally's view on all of it. She does seem slightly weirded out but just takes it all in stride. The man looks nice too, I wonder what his wife is like. He also seems to have a bit of a thing for ally though...

I love this idea. I find it so cute the idea of meeting someone over and over again randomly, and I love ally's view on all of it. She does seem slightly weirded out but just takes it all in stride. The man looks nice too, I wonder what his wife is like. He also seems to have a bit of a thing for ally though...

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This is really cute! Seriously. I love how simple the layout is, and the way she talks about loving the novelty if the train station at midnight and how she loves having "an experience." I can totally relate to that feeling. The story line is just really adorable. Definitely subscribing to see what happens next. (: