Rose Oaks - Comments

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From what I've read, this story seems great. It has good character voice and a sense of mystery to it. I have two cons:

1. The colour of the font makes it difficult to read.
2. There are several grammatical errors, including some sentences that don't make sense.

another killer story my friend! i told you this one would be good and it looks as if i was right :)