Monster - Comments

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It's taken me a while to do this one, I'm sorry.
It's just not a type of story I like or would even want to read lol

But it was interesting. I liked the layout, but it didn't really add to much to the overall story, but it's a minor detail. Your writing style is beautiful and I did enjoy the way you wrote it, just not exactly what you wrote. I didn't enjoy the plot but that's just my own personal preference; however, you did do it justice in the summary. I'm a huge fan of short, concise summaries because long ones are boring and stupid and I hate reading them hahah! So excellent summary! Overall, I couldn't find any grammatical/spelling/punctuational errors so yay! I thoroughly enjoyed how well-thought out the main character was portrayed and how much depth there was to every character despite how far in the background they were.

Despite the fact that this story was not one I would've have chosen to read on my own time, I did enjoy it and it was fantastically written! (:

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This story is so unique. I personally love horror stories, but this...this was so special! The true colors of the characters seem to be shown just by the few details and actions alone, and it paints a perfect picture in my mind. It was beautifully written, and like casserby-x said, Amelia's emotions were complicated and I feel the need to hug her. I like how you put in a tad bit of reluctance, and it makes the story all the more realistic. The layout made the story look so luring and intriguing, and this is unlike anything I've read before. Great job! :D

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I really have to say, wow. I actually wish this was an actual story. There is so much going on and I just feel like I need to know more. While I wouldn't call it a horror story it was definitely a tad creepy how well written it was. I still wish I could no more and it wasn't just a one shot.
You wrote this beautifully. I felt the need to hug Amelia and I could feel all her emotions. Very lovely. I'll definitely try to read more of your work.

Oh wow, this was amazing. I was just so absorbed from start to finish. I just want to read any other works by you now!

Oh my gosh, this story is so.. Different! Which is a good thing! You must update soon! Do they just kill random girls, or does the mistress have some kind of history with them? I definetly didnt expect this sort of story by the summary. I like that you didn't give anything away, it made it much better to read. I didnt see any spelling mistakes or anything and you're a great writer! Subscribing!

This story is amazing! I fell in love with the mistress.

I'm from the Comment Swap. I really like this concept it's an extremely intriguing story. I like how you explain things though I think there could have been a few more details if you wanted to push for them, like what they looked like, what the room was like, the facial expressions even.

One question I do have that made the plot line a little confusing to me is the part where she said: "You don't deserve an answer."
If this is some sort of revenge oriented thing instead of her just being crazy, I didn't catch it. On the contrary, if it's not revenge oriented then I don't understand why she said that, but that's just me.

Otherwise I really did enjoy this, you're a great author and I hope you continue!

I loved this story! Very descriptive and the Mistress character is great.

Wow, this is very good. I just have to point out at the bit just before Amelia strikes the girl it says 'The warm breath cascaded down Amelia's next', I think 'next' should read 'neck', that's just a minor slip-up. Other than that, it's fantastic :)