More Than Friends - Comments

love love love this story! just read all that was posted and fell in love with Liam and Rachel's relationship!!!

Hello, dear writer :) The plot is good so I'm not going to touch on that. It's solid and lovely.

What I'd like to talk about is the formatting. Like AshleyxTwilightx said below, you really should space out your paragraphs and use the quotation marks instead of single apostrophe's. I'm not sure if you're familiar with the rules/codes for posting stories on Mibba, but if you don't follow those codes, you will get reported and your story will get taken down. As for J.K. Rowling's use of singular quotations, I don't believe she does. I'm looking at my personal copy of Order of the Phoenix, and I'm noticing distinct double quotations which are the standard form of showing dialogue. If you have any questions, let me know :)

@ maribaylock
Thanks sweetie :) x x

I love this story so much<3333:) great job, love. :) xx

great update! ohgod never thought this would happen.... haha very unexpected but i like the idea..I love how you can make this story a mixture of cliche and just something totally unexpected ;)

great update :) the plot and is great and Rachel is a great and interesting character :) keep it going and please update soon

AshleyxTwilightx
'Thank you' for the criticism, whether constructive or not, but I got an A* GCSE with the way I write. Highest in the year, actually. And if you have books such as read Harry Potter, J.K Rowling, one of the greatest authors of all time, uses ' rather than ". Please, rather than criticizing the way I write, just comment on the plot, as that is more what I am after. Evidently, no one else who has read the story has had a problem with the structure.

Please go back and edit your chapters.
You should be writing them with spaces like this:

'Morning,' he sang. He gave me a hug before stuffing his stuff into his bag. I smiled and slipped into the bathroom. I showered, brushed my teeth, dressed, did my hair and my make-up before opening the door a while later. Liam was sitting on the sofa with the bed made and his bag packed and stuffed in the corner of the room. He was scrolling through something on his phone.

'Twitter?' I asked and he nodded.

'Following some fans because I haven't been on lately. I'm not following many -'

'Liam Payne, the only celebrity soon to be following more people than are following him,' I said, in a Peter Dixon like voice. He laughed and shook his head.

'I can't follow that many people! My mentions are already blocked up with all these fans asking me to follow them and saying about concerts and the tour, I don't need my homepage so full I can't read what other people who I know are telling me!'

And you should be using these; " "
NOT these: ' '

Whoo, update soon :)