The Vault - Comments

Having written horror myself, I know it can be tough to actually balance the gore with the psychological horror and still make the writing flow, but you did a great job of it :)

It was a good plot twist too, and I loved how the story ended by showing a more human view of the girl by going into her thoughts. It made me really wonder just who and what she was, and what made her need the bodies so badly.

Great story, great description, and it really had me thinking hard all the way through.

This was such a good story. It kept me on my toes the entire time. I really had a struggle reading it because I was trying to stay analytical but it kept sucking me in. I caught hardly any errors and it was very well-written.

I almost didn't catch the girl in the background either, until I was almost done reading it. It kind of freaked me out a little.

The girl being the killer was an excellent plot twist. I didn't see it coming at all. You had really good descriptions too. It was almost like I was there in the room with her. Awesome job. :D

That was such a gorgeous horror story.
It actually creeped me out :P
Good job :)