Very interesting I like it. Its a bit jumps a bit fast from specific to general from dead turtle to what life means. But there is a nice flow as well. When she is herded like a sheep use more words linked to animals or sheep or Shepards and get some more imagery going. Also a few editing mistakes in the sentences. Look up : this sentence has five lines. It might be helpful. All the best writing! Your hands must be so sticky with ice cream!
When she is herded like a sheep use more words linked to animals or sheep or Shepards and get some more imagery going. Also a few editing mistakes in the sentences. Look up : this sentence has five lines. It might be helpful.
All the best writing! Your hands must be so sticky with ice cream!