September 19th, 2012 at 12:48am
I always love your writing because it's perfect and stuff, and this didn't disappoint! Oh wow, someone wanting to become a plus sized model where they have to put on weight to do it is unusual. I kind of hate her friends for ignoring her just because of what she wants to do. I also love how Kelsey's gained weight healthily instead of unhealthily. So far this is really producing a healthy body image message. (':
Woo! I like her mum haha. It's good to see her so supportive of Kelsey. Normally with things like this the mother's unsupportive and you usually end up hating her.
ASDFGHJHGF I love the ending, it's really perfect. So everything about this was really very good indeed so um very well done Kayleigh!
I love what you've done with this story. The content, the approach to the subject, everything. Your characterization in particular brings it to life. Her thought process is difficult for me to understand personally, but how it's written makes it very realistic and I love that.
The only other thing I can really comment on is I like how you took a silly song and made it about something serious. Twisting the original is something I'm very fond of, and you did it wonderfully.
I honestly can't find anything I don't like about this story. And that's the truth. So excellent job.