Your use of details is amazing. This completely pulled at my heart strings, and I found myself sniffling a few times. You are a talented writer, I'm glad I stumbled upon this, I need more original fan fiction like this. By the way I'm here on my own accord, comment swap has been acting up for me. Anyway, I really loved this and will now go through all your stories. :3
I'm in love with this piece. You've captured every single little aspect of feeling lonely and wishing you had someone to love you. I know this because this is how I feel quite often. You've got a very beautiful style of writing. I also really like the layout; it's very simplistic, yet very pretty all the same. Keep up the fantastic work. You're gonna go far with your writing. Best of luck. xx