September 6th, 2012 at 12:30am
very nice. i very much like your use of flashback(s). But use them alot or very very little but with detail. idk if you want feedback but, im gonna go ahead anyways.
Add alittle more nistalgia and longing for the past.
(I dont know if its just me buti could only read two pages/chapters. keep up the good work.
and i just meant that it was good but needed more development.