Confess My Heart and Forgive My Wrongs - Comments

Here from comment swap. :) I came into this not knowing anything about it but was pleasntly surprised to find it was an All Time Low story. That being said, i only have a few minor suggestions. As others have said, you have a really great summary. I also struggle with summaries myself,but yours is really good and makes it somethign that anyone would want to read, regardless of liking All Time Low or not. The first chapter started off a little weird. Instead of starting it off, "Hi. Jenna Daniels" and just throwing into it,maybe you could slowly introduce them,easing into it instead of throwing it out-(Hope that makes sense) Besides that, i think this story has a lot of potentiol. You're a very talented writer, and I wll definetly read what you put out in the future. Keep writing. :)

so basically everyone is blaming Alex hahaha well, it is kind of his fault for going for the wrong girl over and over again ughhh boys are so stupid! I think Alice and Jenna should have a talk so that Jenna could be like "stay away from my man you slut!!" even though that would make things worse

or alice could find out about jenna and alex and could jealous and she'll crawl into his arms instead idk man i wanna know what happens though haha update soon

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I like the idea of having your thoughts in bold, I don't like the idea of changing the point of views. That always annoys me because it can sometimes get confusing. I also like your theme, did you make the banner yourself it's rather pretty

Keep writing and good luck

Well, I will have to agree with the commenters below. This sounded like it would be great, but you could not properly develop it, somehow it fell into cliché which is a shame. Maybe practice your writing a bit more. The idea was great, you just seem to have trouble developing it. But keep writing, practice makes perfect! :)

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I really liked the summary, but the first chapter wasn't as good. When you present your characters as: Hi. Jenna Daniels... It makes the book automatically very cliche. The story is actually very good despite this, and if that part was changed (as the person below me said) it would be even better than it already is.
Keep on writing~~~ c:

I got really excited when I read the summary because this sounded so amazing but the way you introduced the characters just made me cringe. And then there was the cliche of how they've obviously meant to be but they just can't see it.

I'm sure this story would be great if you changed the first couple of chapters and, I don't know, just got rid of the cliche of "we're best friends who act like boyfriend/girlfriend but we're not in love" thing that this story has going on.

I am excited to see where this goes.

Well, it's kind of cliche but it's definitely not bad!! Keep it up, I wanna read more