@ Miss May i really appreciate it thank you sooooooo much(:
August 27th, 2012 at 03:24am
Comment swap sent me here.
After reading over your story, "Take Off" there are just a few things I would like to point out. There are some grammar and spelling errors as well as a few sentences that may need some reworking. As in adding one word in place of another, just to keep the flow going.
I really haven't a proper idea of who your Fan Fiction is about, so some more descriptive details about their personalities and also of the surroundings would be really good to see.
But good on you for putting your writing out there and all the best =]