Pick Up The Phone - Comments

@ kellinquinn
oh :( that was kinda the point :/ nevermind :D thankyou for the contest :)

The plot wasn't really clear, starting with the exposition. I couldn't really tell if they were lovers or just friends. I liked how you gave me something I didn't expect though.

@ All_Fun_And_Games
It should be "been sitting"
And the second sentence should have a semicolon, not a comma in the beginning

@ Silhouette
I will change the number and the I've, whats wrong with the been sat though? And I'm also not sure why the other sentence is awkward, if you could explain these issues to me I will correct them. Thankyou for your feedback :)

Awesome picture that you've got up top. There's one sentence that could use a little revision: "3 hours and the 8 empty coffee cups prove the time Iv been sat here." Non-hyphenated numbers should be spelled out. "I've" and "been sat," too, are problems. The sentence "Our fight continued, usually by now we've given up, but enough is enough" is a bit awkward. Also, I feel that the end is a bit rushed.