Sanctuary - Comments

Love, love, love! I've only really read one Josh Hutcherson fanfic, but I KNOW this one will definitely be better(:
I'm not a grammar Nazi, so I think your writing was really good and well written!
Nobody’s perfect, and neither is their writing! So don’t sweat it(:

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This story has some promise. But I wouldn't make paragraphs as long as your first one. That can turn people away really quickly, and i would work on your punctuation, you got a little comma happy.

While I don't know that this is the most realistic or factual fanfiction I've read I admire your courage to write things considered to be "taboo" too many people try to write dark things, and not enough can write it right. I think you're on the right track with your morbid writing, and I'm sure that's not what the rest of the story will focus on, but it's a skill that I think you could master with time.

this first chapter is really good and from what i can tell from your writing style in this chapter alone it holds a lot of potential. i think if you keep posting this story will get a great response, for i believe it is a very good story and you should definitely keeping working with it ^^