Keep writing stories! I love them(:
September 9th, 2012 at 06:55pm
This was so...morbid but amazing at the same time. I love drabbles that can tell an amazing story in such a small amount of words, and that's what this one does. You can sense that there's a history behind the characters, even without explaining it all. I loved how laid back she was about what he was doing to the guy, like it was something she did all the time and it was no big deal. The last line was a perfect way to end it; it seems to really sum up who your character is and really, how much of a bitch she is. I loved it.
I only noticed one thing:
but she ground the heel of her five inch stiletto stripper heels into his side, making him howl.
The fact that you said heel(s) twice in the sentence sounded odd to me.
Other than that though, amazing job!
