Entanglement - Comments

It's nice to see such a long, completed piece of work on here! I know how hard it is to actually push through and complete things, but I can see that you've even got a sequel up.

So I went through the first five or so chapters and your story is well written! I love stories with a multiple characters and I look forward to finding out what happens to each of them. I'll be keeping this around to come back to on my off days. :]

I'm just gonna subscribe to this for future use. Any story that has the word count of a full length novel deserves some attention.

It's like right as you think it's over, BAM somethin else man =/ poor andrew :(

I really love the plot of this story and you have such a great concept! In the first chapter, I thought there was a little too much dialogue, but that could just be me. I just think there needed to be more action and description, more towards the beginning and the end of the chapter. Also, in the second chapter, you started out with some really good description and imagery, and then it went into a bunch of dialogue again. Other than that, I think this story is so good! You have some really interesting characters, and like I said before, the plot is absolutely phenomenal in every way! This is an excellent story!

Hey, comment swapper here :)

first off I love the layout and the choice of picture :D your writing is easy to read on the background as well.

It's very well written as well and I really like the concept of the story! Good luck with your writing :)

I'm really starting to like this story. It's going at a good pace and the three of you have well thought out characters that I already enjoy. Keep up the chapters!