The Grandest Ballet - Comments

The use of Regina as a sentence starter seemed a bit repetitive. The grammatical errors didn't distract that much from the story and the concept was good.

I thought at first it would be like a ghost story. I never would have guessed that she was insane herself and just momentarily lost her identity. I like how 'Regina' haunted her at first and controlled her before she found out that she was Regina.

Regina escaping from the police station unharmed seemed a little bit unrealistic, but then again, it could happen. Sometimes they're just slow to react. The realization that she was Regina seemed a little rushed.

Overall, it was a pretty good story and it had a nice concept. I liked the details.

I like it! Good luck with the contest!

@ Saul Hudson
Thanks, i thought i had changed the font colour, i'll fix that now.

First of all you need to fix your layout because it's extremely hard to read your story, it's a great story with a great concept, it's just really hard to read, I do love your writing though, I think it's well written, I think the concept is fantastic and I love the descriptions you gave.