My Heart Has Lost All Hope - Comments

@ vannahboo111
I'll try to update again tonight <. 3 ! Idk when that will be but ill try ! Haha I'm so tried though

AMAZING. I love that Ronnie is head over heals for her <3
I hope he doesn't get in more trouble than he already is.. Loved the update. Hurry and do it again, quick! (:

Lost a subscriber :( pretty sad about it. I'll update soon I have some writers block tonight and I'm nervous for tomorrow . Update shall be Sunday at the latest

@ lostinthecityofsin
yeah haha Im gonna post another chapter tonight hopefully im having a bit of writers block ahah.

Yay! Squeals :)

@ lostinthecityofsin
hahaha well he had the guys run off when he took her to Abby's grave to get presents secretly, remember they had the day off. i think i didn't make that part very clear though haha

yes I love that you see what Im trying to do with these chapters, i try to get the emotions clear more than anything else.

and maybe ;] we will see what happens , there shall be a sequal when im through with this particular section of Vanessa and ronnie< 3 .

I've been neglecting i know but i wanted to wait for a few chapters i could give you a big comment with lots of feedback :)

First of all I LOVE how Ronnie is trying so hard to prove himself with all these little things he's doing its really cute. Like i've said so many emotions in so many chapters, they're growing so much closer, I love how Nessa is slowly realizing that Ronnie could be so good for her, because they could really help each other. the birthday was ONE of my favourite chapters :) my question is if they're on tour how is he able to go get a macbook? LOL :D BUT all the presents were really sweet!
more? :D <3
IS WEDDING BELLS IN THE FUTURE

@ vannahboo111
He seems very confused about his love however. [: hahah Im so glad you continue to read

LOVE the updates!
It's adorable, you know? Ronniekins expressing his love <3

@ vannahboo111
Thank you sweetie (: I'm about to make another chapter hopefully I don't call asleep while writing it (: thanks for always reading love

I absolutely love love love the update! <3
This is definitely one of my favorite stories! I just love it so much!

@ PoeticMess.
I get the same way haha

@ offmymeds
Well good(:
I get too happy to proof read. I want to post it as soon as I can, so I proof read quickly and end up missing a few things.

@ PoeticMess.
Thank you ! Yea I've always ha a problem with proper grammar as well I'm going to proof read extra carefully now (:

@ offmymeds
Trying is really what matters. (: I wasn't a good grammatical writer when I started but I learned by doing, so now I'm pretty good at it. Although I do mess up too, I don't proof read as much as I should. DX

You're a good writer(: Just have to take a little extra time to use correct grammar. :]

@ PoeticMess.
Thank you so much (: I'll get more careful with my tenses ! And I'll fix those errors as soon as I'm on the computer (: I'm glad you like it ! I'm not the best writer but I'm trying haha <. 3

Hey(: I'm glad you pointed me in the direction of your story. I really like it so far. There's a good plot line and you're a good writer, there are just quite a few grammatical errors in the first chapter that I thought I could fix up for you so that people don't get discouraged on the first page. (:

This room is filled with hundreds of people, wall to wall, yet the man controlling the room won't stop looking at me even though I just entered this foriegn place with no clue of what's going on.

This man had piercing eyes, it felt like he was staring straight into my very being. He was attractive, long black hair, tattoos all over his chest and arms. He had some eyeliner on and a denim jacket with patches all over it. He was singing as his band played around him.

Girls were screaming for him, throwning their bras, and panties at his feet, begging for him to notice them, but he's here staring right at me. His is song coming to a close as his guitarist takes center stage for his solo. I watch him walk over to the side and talk to a man. This man pointed at me.

Oh no! I need to get out of here but I was trapped in the crowd, that bouncer must have ratted me out... I thought I had gotten away this time for sure. Maybe I can sneak out through the bathroom....

"Hello ma'am, someone has requested your presence backstage." I turned and slammed right into a huge security guard before he spoke. He held out his hand for me to take to follow him backstage. Shit.

I'm sure I could have gotten away by saying no or something, but I'm tired of running and maybe it's not what I think... and I kind of hope I'll get to talk to him. The beautiful black haired singer.

Girls looked at me in envy as I was escorted backstage. We were going through the side of the stage as I was escorted past I caught the eye of mystery man, as I looked up at him he smirked and winked at me. What's going on?

We reach the back, there were no cops that I could see, which was a relief. The guard told me to enjoy the show from behind the drummer, I may as well indulge him...

"HI MY NAME IS RONNIE IM AN ADDICT!"

These lyrics left the mouth of the dark haired stranger...Well I guess his name is Ronnie, now isn't it?

Well...

Hi, Ronnie my name is Venessa and we have that in common....

(:
There's one last thing I noticed when I was fixing a few errors, you switch between tenses, so be careful!
Here's what I mean:
"I looked up at him" Past tense.
"We reach the back" Present tense. So if you want, be sure to fix those. (:

But other than the simple grammar errors, it's really so far. Really interesting!

@ vannahboo111
Aww thank you love (: I try to write for you guys !

@ lostinthecityofsin
Why thank you (: I appreciate it ! This story is going to be so long ! Haha

YAY! But first OMG Those words that Nessa and Dylan Shared? i couldnt believe he would talk to her that way! Very creative girlfriend proposal.. who would say no in front of millions of people? very tricky. and very ronnie like, The whole date chapter was so cute :D <3