Keep Me Waiting - Comments

@ mcrzluver
Thank you. I'm glad that you loved it.

I loved this story! I think my favorite part was finding out that Sam, who was still innocent through out most of this story, had 5 children in the end and was pregnant again. It made me giggle a lot. :) Great job!

New reader here! This story is amazing.

i have not read your story yet but i am reading it now xxx

Well..

At least my sister and I are smart enough to know that there is something entirely too suspicious about Montoya's sudden change in attitude.

I mean, c'mon the man has been after us for several months and then his kid gets killed and he suddenly changes his tune? Not fucking likely.

He's just willing to say whatever the fuck he has to say to get the help that he needs to get revenge, and then? Then he's gonna go straight back to wanting to kidnap our cute asses, and you know what? It's gonna be a million times easier seeing as how close he is to the guys at that point.

Never mind the fact that once he get's what he wants, he's probably going to turn on the guys seeing that, y'know, they knew that the one woman (aside from his psycho daughter, of course) he ever cared about was alive.

So yeah... its a good thing that Sam and I haven't gone all stupid and realize all of this.

As for this Martin guy... I really don't trust him.

I've had this really weird feeling about him since he started with that 'I'm working for Montoya so I can get revenge for my sister' stuff.

There is just something off about it and him, and I do not trust him.

*Shakes head*

Stubborn fucking teenagers.

That girl is going to regret running away when her ass gets kidnapped, that's for sure.

But yeah... I can't wait to read the next one.

Update it!

Soon!

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Sooo yeah.

I loved both updates.

A lot.

A lot, a lot.

They were amaze-balls, fer seriousness.

I mean, first you go and get rid of the nuisance that was Jasmine Montoya, which by the way I am very happy about... Now you just need to get rid of that stupid bitch Chantal.

And then poor Matt, gets an excited 'Hello' quickly followed by him getting bitched out for not being more careful and nearly getting himself killed dead even though he really had no control over that.

Not that all that matters, because a certain redhead's hormone ridden brain doesn't allow her to think like a rational human being.

I like how everyone else is either stuck on Matt being all sweet and caring or the fact that I'm like 'Yep, he knocked me up and we got the two fer one special'.

But yeah...

The updates were rad-tabulous.

I want more.

Soon.

Very, very soon.

Mmkay?

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Whooo hoo the wicked witch is dead :-)

Aww I'm so happy that Zacky and the guys know that everyone is ok. Poor Zacky would have been a wreck knowing that his girlfriend and daughter were in danger.

At least they know that Chantal is the snitch, and I hope they deal with her accordingly.

Shit, this only has fourteen comments? What the actual, legitimate fuck?! It pisses me off how excellently written and executed stories like this don't get more attention, but the badly written ones with wandering plots do. Ugh.

Anywho. I absolutely love this story! I so was not expecting Sam's captor to just be like "well, I'm going to help you", but good plot twist.

I love this!

Looking forward to another update! c:

Soo...

I was not expecting that ending, that's for damn sure. I mean, just... yeah.

Like I said... was not expecting that.

I feel kinda bad for Zack though. I mean, there he is stressing out like nobodies business because as far as he knows one of Montoya's men nabbed his fiancee, and in reality she's perfectly fine.

In fact, if you wanna be honest she's just as safe with him as me and all the kids are with Cynthia and her family. Possibly even safer, seeing as how dick-face and his minions are still lookin' for me and he's totally not focused on her at all because he knows where she is.

But I do have to say... this Martin guys is definitely gonna deserve to get a few good punches to the face.

But anyways...

I loved it.

You know I loved it.

Especially with the unexpected, yet completely happy, turn of events that took place in this one.

Update it.

Soon.

Very.

Very.

Sooon.

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Well...

It started out promising.

And then?

And then you fucking went and ended it that way.

I mean, really?

Fucking really?!

I am not fucking happy about it.

I mean, shit, for all anyone knows she's dead. I mean, sure I really doubt that is the case, but really? You're gonna go and stress out her knocked up twin sister like that? Way to go.

Matt?

He's gonna be supremely pissed off.

Zack too for that matter, I mean, she is his fiancee.

Montoya is gonna wish he were dead by the time they get done with him.

I'm just saying.

Update it.

Now.

Right now.

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Mmmkayy.

Soo... I loved this one.

A lot.

Like, A LOT, a lot.

I mean, the start was just pretty much cuter than cute. What with the whole 'I miss Matt' bit and Michael being all 'Girls are gross'.

By the way, very glad for that. Last thing any of us need is for him to have an early interest in girls.

And then Matt gets all cute and stuff with his whole 'Let me the fuck out of this bed so I can use a fucking phone and then go kill those fuckers'. Sure, his motives may be a little selfish, what with wanting revenge and to get me back stateside as soon as humanly possible, but who gives a shit.

I find it endearing in the most fabulous of ways.

Never mind we have the whole brand new development of me actually admitting to Matt that I am, in fact, in love with him despite the fight I put up against being so.

And then?

Then we get nice, violent, super-protective Matt. And Zack too for that Matter.

I mean, they find out what mine and Sam's stupid fuck of a father and that Montoya bastard had in store for us and they don't think, just react and shoot the asshole they were pumping for information square in the chest.

Intimidating...

Not to mention sexy.

Clearly my twin sister is in rather capable hands with Zack, loll.

Anyways... I loved it.

I can't wait to read the next one.

Update soon!

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I think that it goes without saying, I absolutely adored this one.

All but the whole Matt getting jumped and nearly exploded into a billion little pieces.

Was not my favorite thing.

Then again... I'm sure you knew that.

The end, however?

Super fucking cute.

I mean, he's all laid up in bed after a near-death experience and he's more worried about me knowing that I love him then healing...

Just...

BAWWWWWWW.

I want more of this.

Very soon.

So hurry and update everything that needs to be updated so I can have more of it.

Mmkay?

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love the update, and damn I want to kill the Montoyas. Persistent little bunch aren't they?

Aww, I love how either though he was nearly blown up he wanted Sara to know that he loved her :-)

aww i love this im gonna murder Jazmine in my dreams tonight though -shrug-

Sooo.

I loved all of them.

Absolutely loved them.

From the running away, to well. the running away again. Loll.

Not gonna lie, I love how often this one is getting updated. At this rate its gonna be done before a lot of other things that you've had started for a while are. Not that I'm bitching, because, like I said...

I love it.

I have to give everyone, and Brian and Abby in particular, credit for not taking Matt's shit or passively dealing with his fucking massive fit in the last one.

Also... Matt getting the crap kicked out of him, and being called all kinds of nasty names with no real explanation? Left me ridiculously amused. He sorta had it coming.

And I gotta say, one of the highlights for me in this was Jackson's brush off of Matt's attempted threat. Probably because he was so calm and collected, not to mention everything he said was correct.

It's not like Matt could argue with him. Like at all.

He may not like it, but doesn't change the fact that he couldn't argue if he wanted to.

Obviously he underestimated someone and their ability to make friends with the right people.

*Grins*

Also, glad to see things are starting to progress with Sam and Zack. Poor girl needs some male attention in her life, obviously.

But anyways...

I won't harass you to work on the next one, mostly because I know you already are, so yeah.

Just hurry and update this.

I wanna read the next update nowww.

xD

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oh man Matt's gonna be pissed that shes run off and that Jackson has helped her no less. I wonder if he'll try to track her down

Ooh dinner with Zacky's parents is going to be interesting :-)

oh lord Sara's as stubborn as a mule - someone tries to shoot her and she blithely goes "I'll run away again". She's got a target on her back and can't expect to live long out there on her own

Soo yeah...

What is there to say about this one? I mean really... other than I abso-fucking-lutely adore it.

I mean, seriously... I could get into how fabulous it is, but that would take far too fucking long.

I also know that I'm soo fucking far behind in commenting this one that its not funny, but then again, I've been ridiculously busy and you know that.

Besides, as your most loyal commenter, I think its safe to say I'm allowed to be lazy sometimes and its mandatory for you to cut me some slack when I am.

But honestly, like I said, I'm loving this one.

A lot.

And I still maintain that this is, hands down, some of the best smut you've ever written. Its just all steamy and sexy and just, yeahh.

I don't think I need to continue for you to get where I'm going with that, so I'll just say this...

Keep it up.

As for Matt, however, he should stop being such a dick. I mean, seriously? To throw a bitch-fit like that in the last one because someone wouldn't open the fucking door for him? What the fuck did he expect? The door to be thrown open before he was drug inside and his clothes were ripped off?

Not fucking likely.

But yeahh.

Update this.

Soon.

I know its headed in interesting directions, and I wanna see exactly what those directions are.

*Grins*

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I LOVE this story like love love it Update SOON!!!!!!
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