I absolutely adored this story:)
September 15th, 2012 at 07:44pm
Awe, that was so cute! Wel the end was, the beginning was rather sad, actually. I loved how her daughter restored her faith in the world, that's awesome.
The layout was so pretty, I adore that background. It went well with the plot of the story as well. The title was what made me click on the story though, and I'm glad I did.
I did notice a couple things:
I wanted to continue and relief her from the nearing pain.
"Relief" should be "relieve"
The grass is green almost of everywhere
I don't think that "of" should be there.
Also, in Summer's dialogue, some of the words she used and the way she phrased things sounded a bit grown up for a little girl. Like the word "beige" doesn't really seem like a word a little girl would use. Maybe that's just me though.
Anyways, I really did like this story. It had just the right amount of sadness and happiness and cuteness mixed in. Very lovely!