The Death of a Dream - Comments

I liked reading the peoples point of view based off today's technology. It was really believable. I was actually really sad when Captain America died in the comics. He was one of my favorites.

The ending was wonderful.

I really did love reading this. It was great.
I thought the flow of the sentences was off a bit, to me it seemed a bit choppy, and I liked reading all the news article quotes and what the people thought. It was very real to me, especially since you added the hater quotes, too. It was a bit confusing how you kept going back and forth between dates, but it really added to the depth of the story so either way I enjoyed it. I thought the Captain was clever when he said, "Made in the USA."
However, I loved the ending the most. It was really heartwarming and just gave me the warm fuzzies inside. Bahahaha! XD\
Great job on this! :)

"What are you? How are you still alive?" Doom screeches.

Cap smirks as he runs forward. "Made in the USA."

I definitely burst out laughing at Cap's response.

BUT WHY WOULD YOU DO THAT!? The picture along with the story? Ugh, you have killed my fangirl feels, sir. This was perfect and I shit you not when I say that I am tearing up a little. Great job, great detail, and overall great story telling.

Pardon me whilst I grab some tissues ;~;!

@ Kiakara17
I like it and all but I think it stands well enough on its own.

@ The Sun God
oh, okay then.

@ Kiakara17
I could but I have A Batman story to finish plus a fantasy and film noir books I am working on. This as of now is not a priority.

story@ The Sun God
That would be so interesting to read you should. I want to see how he reacts to being the next 'Captain America'

@ Kiakara17
I have an idea for the boy to become the next Captain America but developments for a new story have been on te back burner so far.

I love how the dialogue is so real in this story! Also I am a major of Captain America fan but I do have to say I love Thor a little more xD Are you continuing the story only asking because this is for a contest?

A story of Captain America dying? That's great honestly. How you wrote it was even better. Switching back and forth between days and such. From during his fighting to his death to when he visited a sickly child and even to the comments on him and his death. It's also great because that hatred for super heroes in their universe is very real. And I believe it would be that way if they were real.

Also, might I add that this reminds me of Nightwing taking up the mantle of Batman once Batman dies. I haven't read the comics so correct me if I'm wrong.

I seriously can’t believe you just killed Captain America!!!! He is my absolute favorite! But I did enjoy the bit at the end where Tommy decides that he will become the next Captain America. It reminded me a little bit of the end of The Dark Knight Rises with what Blake does when Bruce leaves. I also really liked that you added the quotes from the paper. I thought that was really unique and interesting. And I’m just saying… You made Captain America die on my birthday. September 30th is my birthday and he died on that day! I don’t think I will ever be able to forgive you for that!