Hallways - Comments

Well hells bells, I thought that I'd get this one but I didn't. I guess it's not completely meant to be understood. Either that or my AP class was a complete waste of time and useless. Anyway, when you said that this one was going to be a longer and better version of Baby I Got The Death Rattle I was like pfft I doubt it can get better because I already thought it was magnificent. But I was wrong. This was a million times better so if the other was magnificent I really don't even know what the word to describe this would be, to be honest. The ending was really interesting to me though - she was supposed to be an angel and was dying in hell getting ready to go to heaven, but she remembers why she's in hell so it's like you die in a video game and go back to your last check point? Man. I feel like there's something so much deeper in this than what I'm getting out of it right now. You're going to have me contemplating this all day. You know what? I'm going to go think about it for awhile and then I'll get back to you. This is going to drive me nuts until I get it. ❤

alright, and this is even better. I don't even know if I understand what the fuck is going on but I think I like it. you have a talent for creating the most beautifully fucked up shit. not to mention your writing is beautiful.

also, this part shit like Crocs and Rose Art crayons, a lunch box stocked with endless plain tofu.
busted my shit up.

i really like the whole good person sentence (too lazy to go back and quote yes) but jesus lula this is so different from anything ive ever read and pretty mcuh the best thing ive ever read im on chapter 2 rn and still going strong i dont know but its like you're writing in some perspective can be lightheart you know but then you read it like twice or thrice or whatever the fourth equivilant is of those and then you're just like fuckin brilliant you are and im just like laughing because he skateboards across hell and that makes no sense but then you think about it and its funny and its great altogether and stop it its too good (reading back on this comment i make no sense its all over and im pretty much that way 24/7) love you

brilliantly original, but i swear i'm so lost. i adore this, regardless. <3

you're brilliant and this is probably one of the most original things i've read on here

I always get overwhelmed by your originality, it's like that monkeys chained to typewriters thing you know? ugghhhhh you're perfection and I adore baby and I adore hallways and I want you to keep writing on here always!

the only thing I'd point out though, and it feels like sacrilege but "my arm’s skin peels off completely" sounds kind of clunky, perhaps "the skin on my arm peels off" would work better? but it's your party ♡♡♡

The story seems really interesting. It's just that the font color is a bit hard to read since it's so light.