Love Is a Word Used Much Too Often - Comments

Proximity to Requisite - 7/10
It took me a second to get it, to be honest. But when I did, it was like a bat to the head. It's a good take on the quote.

Uniqueness of Take on Requisite - 10/10
I love how they're sort of in love but smart enough not to have to say it. This sort of romance is always the best, when it's a feeling, not just empty words.

Layout - 9/10
Okay, maybe I'm morbid but I loved it. It was simple, but that didn't make it boring.

Writing style - 10/10
You have the sort of style where I had to pay close attention or else I might skip a word and totally end up confused. But I loved the attention to the character's psyche and details around him.

Emotional Quality 7/10
There did seem to be a sort of apathy lying under the surface but I wasn't unhappy with it. It's important to have stories where the characters aren't as involved as you (meaning, I) am as a person.

Grammar - 9/10
I only caught one mistake but, of course, I wasn't trying to tear your words apart to find one...

Likability - 8/10
Because I wasn't catching on at first (which I will admit, is my problem, not your's, but it is my contest so my opinion kind of matters.) it was hard for me to latch onto what I was reading. But when I went through it again, I developed a slow, steady sort of affection for it.

Creativity - 8/10
I love the idea of a club for the otherworldly but it has been done before. Though, the idea of focusing on the humans who service such creatures is very intriguing.

Extra Points for General Badassery -
+1 For slaughtering some innocent girl
+1 For blood on the layout

Total: 70/80

I think if I wasn't the person I am, this totally would have gone over my head. But with vast romance research under my belt and a few complicated relationships as well, I could attach myself to this pair once I had read through completely, regardless of how little of the story included the pair (which was less that I would have liked, but only because they were so interesting).

This was really original, and quite interesting!
Dagon seems like an intriguing kind of guy lol :)
Great job!

I love this... It was awsome. I love the way it was written, and the way he thinks. C: -gives cookie. Recomends-