The idea of this story is super cute! I like it a lot, even though i can spot some grammatical error (and trust me, im not that good with grammar either). but let aside the grammatical things because this turns out to be one of my favorite fanfic already :)
I do like this story..but there are a lot of grammatical issues. I'm just trying to be helpful, because I really do like the story line. It's just hard to read with all of the mistakes. I think comments should offer constructive criticism along with praise...but if you ever need someone to edit your chapters I would be glad to help. Anyways, the story really is great aside from that and I look forward to reading the rest of it. :) Much love!