50 Shades of Styles. - Comments

that wasn't a bad chapter, it was really good! i enjoyed it, can't wait for an update, babe. :) xxx

oh my god this sounds so hot write more ok

I'm all in.
Ready for more.

love it already, can't wait for more!

I'm so excited for this haha

definitely interesting. can't wait for an update, babe! :) xx

but kept under control with a bit of hair product that kept it under control.
This was redundant. It was probably an accident (I do this a lot without paying attention or whenever I lose my place). Just take out one of the under controls and you're good. :)

They almost resumed emeralds,
I think you meant resembled. Resumed means continued.

She doesn’t know what to say.
Doesn't should be didn't. The rest of your chapter is in past tense, so this should be in past as well.

Her best friend, Georgia’s voice was loud through the phone receiver.
I think it would be better to put Georgia, her best friend's,. Just a suggestion.

I didn't get to finish reading but I definitely like this and I'll keep updated. I'll be sure to read the rest ASAP!