Waterfront - Comments

This is a great short story, they matured so much just within that day. I liked watching Andrews character figure everything out. You are really good at writing and have a great ability to tell a story. I didn't really see any errors or anything and you said it was a smut story but honestly it really wasn't that bad. I have read stories that are very detailed and sexual. This didn't give too much but just enough, you really balanced it out.

I could have sworn I already commented on this :S must be a glitch ._.

What I loved about this story was the growth of the characters and their ability to move on from a bit of a troubled past. It's very brave of her to accept him again, I know it's not something I could ever do!

You are very descriptive and I could picture a lot of what was going on in my head, so well done on that. It's wellw ritten and makes me wonder where the couple are now and what their doing; did they survive? are they still loved up? And so on.

Whether you add more to this or not, I think it's lovely the way it is, and I'm glad you gave me such a happy ending to read!

I love this story, I like how beautifully it is written and how detailed it is. It's easy to imagine everything how you have wrote it. I love the emotion and expression you've managed to portray through the characters, and I love their relationship between each other. The story is interesting and kept me captivated to reading it. Overall, this a good story.
Lucy.

I love the opening descriptions; it's very easy to picture the scene, and the paragraphs flow together wonderfully. The way you portray your characters is also really good.

ust to tease me.. You might want to change that to third person, to make it fit with the rest of the story.