I Was Married to the Sun - Comments

I loved how you incorporated the title into the story! That was brilliant. I don't know which one stemmed first, but I love that they were attached to one another. And the story kept up with that theme through each chapter. I like that this story was revolved more around the message as opposed to the action of the story. It was really unique and I like that! And I think everything is unfolding at a really nice pace so far. We get to see more little by little and it doesn't feel too rushed which authors tend to do. Amazing so far!

This is a darling piece of writing. I love the way you describe things so in depth, but in the same way, you do not suffocate and break the story doing so. Well done! I love the whim and dream-like quality feel I get from your writing style; I could see this piece turned into a small film for like a festival or something like that. The dialogue is conversational and the characters are believable.

I love how the story revolved around a sort of jargon sentence because the average reader would be in Hazel's shoes too; they would be left clueless to what the meaning behind it is. I think that really wraps the reader more into the story because they can relate to Hazel. Overall, a wonderful job!

I absolutely love it when authors have back stories. That's something I always find difficult to make and you've done it phenomenally. Seriously, I adore this. I just want to hug it.

I really liked the whimsy of this entire piece. I found it very interesting! It was a really nice read and it flowed along really well. I didn't even have to try. I just enjoyed it. Plain and simple. Haha. You're a fine writer, hopefully you write more and more. I'd love to see more stuff from you. :3

...That ending is SO COOL. Ugh. That's just perfect. I love the explanation and how there's a tour around the city. And THE LAST LINE WAS SO PERFECT. ahdf;asjdkf Ugh. This was awesomeness.

Oh my god. This entire story is something magnificent. The plot line is amazing. The stories behind everything is perfect. I adore it :)

Oh my god. This entire story is something magnificent. The plot line is amazing. The stories behind everything is perfect. I adore it :)

She finally found her! Oh my goodness, the description of the weather in the beginning was to die for!

YES. SHE FOUND HER. Hahaha.

Ugh. This is just so interesting. And I really love your writing. It's incredible. :D

Oh my God. This story is so interesting to me. Hahaha. Like, I really want to know what the phrase means. HAZEL, FIND THAT GIRL RIGHT NOW.

Also, I just love your writing. It's so introspective and detailed and perfect. UGH. ahd;sfjasd But yes, this is fabulous and you are fabulous, and I can't wait to read more of it. :D

Ugh. Ugh this is so beautiful. Why are you such an amazing writer? Every word has meaning and I love that. Every word has significance to the rest of the sentence and if you take one word out or even change it to a synonym, it would lose any sort of importance. And that's why I love this as much as i do. Brilliant, really.

Ugh. Ugh this is so beautiful. Why are you such an amazing writer? Every word has meaning and I love that. Every word has significance to the rest of the sentence and if you take one word out or even change it to a synonym, it would lose any sort of importance. And that's why I love this as much as i do. Brilliant, really.

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Oh my gosh I love this! I can't wait to read more! This chapter was so beautifully writen and I just, I'm excited. :D

Ugh, gorgeous layout.

Also, I love the way that this chapter, although it barely touches upon the plot, is still very captivating and mysterious. Ugh. I can't wait to read more. :)

I'd first like to say that the way that you write is absolutely exquisite. All your wordage is absolutely perfect and your descriptions of the actions are great. What got me most was definitely the description of the coffee shop as "homely" and "intimate." Those are the best kinds of coffee shops and the fact that that is the setting for this, piques my interest even more than it was before :) I'm so excited for this. You really have no idea.

Also, the chapter title is really very lovely as well :) Great job, dear!

Before reading this, I need to comment and tell you that I'm so very excited about this :)