Braids & Icebergs - Comments

Comment Swap brought me here, and I'm so glad it did. I'm not sure what all to say because I feel as though it's all been said before in the comments and probably better than I could do. The writing is beautiful and has a haunting lyrical quality that people try to achieve so often but rarely do successfully. The whole piece has a fantastic sort of fairy tale like tone, possibly from having the voice of the narrator so present and involved. Detailed without getting bogged down, graceful, and wonderfully eloquent. My favorite thing would have to be the first sentence which really sets up everything that follows wonderfully.

Wow, I love this an awful lot. I like how beautifully written it is, and you writing flows smoothly, it is easy to read and to stay captivated. It is so detailed, that I can see all the effort you've put in. It is incredibly interesting and unique. I honestly love it. Keep up the good work, because this lovely. x

This is positively beautiful, and the theme works so well with it, especially with the mentioning of butterflies in the stomach, and the hair turning into beautiful works of art. It reminded me very much of Memoirs of a Geisha with it's elegance and grace. Your writing is very smooth and fluent.

Comment Swap brought me here, and I must say this was rather beautiful. You have a very eloquent way of writing, the words just flow and I don't have to re-read any mistakes or anything because it's all so perfect.

My favourite line would have to be this:

"Whatever Jessica touches, they turn into something beautiful.

Be it weaving and twisting strands of hair or sewing delightful, smooth velvet fabrics together, or just creating something out of nothing at all but what she really likes about it is the peace that it brings her when she’s doing them."

I just thought it was particularly beautiful. Your vocabulary is excellent, and I didn't spot any spelling or grammar mistakes.

I've recommended this, it is really brilliant. You are a very talented writer, keep writing!

I come to you via comment swap!!! That being said, this story isn't exactly my cup of tea; I don't usually read this kind of story. That being said, I do think this was very well written and creative. It was also very descriptive, which I liked. And I also loved the 2 pictures at the top of the page! Great job and keep up the good work!!

This was so sweet! Sica is so affectionate and lovely, but her inner-voice is very witty. You have incredible talent. Your descriptions are wonderful and you have a firm grasp on not re-using adjectives. I appreciate that.

(Your layout is very pretty, too )