Final Call - Comments

Seems I saved the best one of the bunch for the last. Because wow. So many love and pain and hope and heartbreak all in one short story. In one of your comments I read that for Brendon it’s just one bridge too far to forgive Ryan for cheating. And I feel the same way about it, but for me it feels that it is one bridge too far exactly because Brendon loves Ryan so much. Because he is scared that he may be able to forgive Ryan but never forget it and that it will forever change their relationship – which it obviously does indeed. And it feels that he is leaving this relationship, this boy he cares for so much, exactly because he cares so much for him.
Just… You are amazing! I really look forward to reading some more of you whenever you write something new!

I have to start off by saying, that I don't really read fanfiction simply because I don't seem to belong to a lot of the fandoms. I have heard of Panic at the Disco though, so that's something, I guess. Your layout is absolutely gorgeous, it's simple but elegant, which is my favourite kind of layout.

This story was so sad, and I really got a feel for the emotions running through each character. It was really effective and gets you feeling sorry for both the characters, so you kind of want the story to continue so that they can reconcile. It was an amazing story, you're a brilliant writer.

Chocolate Freddo
This was such a heart wrenching piece. I actually felt the emotion in it and found myself bleeding inside for Brendan. I don't know why Ryan did what he did, I can't imagine what Brendan done to drive him off; but my god, he's persistent! I probably shouldn't have laughed, but I did; when Brendan found him outside the door. I guess in a way it shows how determined he was, how sorry he was; then again I see it as being symbolical, lowering himself to that pathetic level after his actions.

I'm only sorry that this wasn't longer, or chaptered. It's wonderful as it is though! I's a well written piece and you can believe it, because I do not read PATD fiction; but this was so true to it's nature and real. The guys weren't glorified, dramatic or anything I've come to expect; they were just two people in a broken relationship.

I hope your Chocolate Freddo tastes as good to you, as Final Call did to me.

lollipop~!

@ Zero Kiryu
Thanks for your lovely comment :) And yeah. Ryan does love Brendon. A whole lot, really. And Brendon knows that, and he loves him so much too, but he just can't forgive Ryan. It was just that one step too far, I think.

Sorry for the late Halloween treat! I was caught up with work and my lil tot, that it was impossible for me to log onto the web! Alright, you requested for a comment on this story so here goes.

It's a tad rare to find stories about the FBR/Decaydance artistes nowadays, since their "reign" in the music industry has died down tremendously after 2009. So it's pretty refreshing to read something about Panic, as I do like them, although I don't really consider myself a fan.

The story gave me quite the heartache, seeing that Ryan cheated on Bren, and Bren not giving in to Ryan's apology. Your fluidity in writing gives me the emotions to relate to how each character is feeling. What I did not understand was the ending when Ryan walked away from Brendon after answering his question whether the other lad was better or not. It was stated that He gets up and walks away with something that looks a lot like love on his face. So did Ryan enjoyed the other lad better, or does he still loves Brendon, like what he claims to? Sorry, I'm a little lost there.

Other than that, it's a pretty short one-shot, filled with a whirlwind of emotions and nicely written. Kudos, babe!

@ Aaron Cross
No it isn't, but thanks for the comment anyway

I see that this is a sequel to Vacant I assume? Your writing style is very interesting for me to read. It's strange but I like it.

This is über weird since i'veread this story before but I never comment on this hahaha. I'm never good at giving comments so when I found out that you want me to comment on this one, I was pretty happy since I've read it already.

I love panic at the disco and I love brendon urie. So brownie points for you!!! This story hurts me though, I hate sad story because well....they make se sad. I love it so much that I will reccomend this story, yeah? Okay, I love you. <3

@ grey fullbuster
Thanks so much. Wow. That means a lot.

Okay so this hurt my heart. I seriously felt the heartbreak they both were going through. This is one of the best slash fics I've ever read in like any of the fandom slash I've read. You're a brilliant writer and I'm so envious and I'm not just saying that!

Title and Layout
I liked the title, I thought it fit the story rather well and the layout was kind of...I want to say psychedelic but that sounds odd, aha. It was really interesting.

Summary
I felt like there was a bit too much information crammed into the summary. Most of the stuff you included is in the "info" tab, so it seemed a little unnecessary.

Story Itself
I think this is the first Ryden story I've ever read, now that I think about it. I like how you portrayed the characters though, that was lovely. I also like how you started the story with what seems like it would normally go closer to the end, and then you almost work backwards to explain what's going on. I've tried to do that tons of times but it never works out like I want it to.

I really loved the amount of emotion you put into this. There's so many stories that use too much dialogue and can't get the emotion into it, but you did a really good job of it.

The only thing that kind of bugged me was fact that you used dashes as page breaks. That's always been a bit of a pet peeve of mine though.

Overall, lovely job and thanks for entering! (:

yeah, Comment swapper <3 I'm so glad I did it now, because this is an amazing story ^-^ I did cry at the end actually, and I can't believe how attached I got to these characters in a short period of time.

Comment swap bought be here & I'm glad it did.
I'm a sucker for this kinds of writing style & I think that you pulled it off quite well. I liked the part where Brendon tries to convince the both of them that he's not like that.

In the end, I didn't cry but you know that familiar tinge in your heart when you read something bittersweet? yeah, that.

You really did a great job and keep up the good work! Keep on writing (:

Comment swapper here. I love this story. You can feel the emotion and sadness conveyed in this moving story. It was easy to read, I didn't see any mistakes (grammar or spelling), and I was moved. I hope more people see this and get to read it. I was very impressed.