Memories Remain - Comments

Yay! You updated! And I can't wait to find out what happenes..... O.O

Oh god oh god oh god whats going to happen

Aaaaagggghhhhhhh. One if the best stories ever is back. I missed this story so much. Plus these chapters are great. Can't wait for more because this story is addicting.

Love this chapter

Fantastic!! I've missed this so I'm really glad you updated. Looks like Gaby has missed out on a reunion with Jimmy :( Will she go out with David now?

Please update again soon.

Great chapter! I know how you feel, girl. Sometimes you can have all the drafts typed out and it just doesn't seem right. I get that all the time, no worries though. I'm sure one day, it'll just hit you. Happens to me all the time. I follow you on Tumblr already and I think you follow me too. c; anyways, good luck with working everything with the story, I hope we can read more soon. <3

... ... .. Sorry can't think of a comment.. .. Too tired... Good chapter.

Thiss needs updated lol

@ prickly vines
Don't worry. thank you, btw c:

It seem like you have a good story concept going on here. I like the prologue already starting out with drama and giving a little bit of background to the story, i.e. Jimmy is a jerk and has been for a long time but she's been hanging onto him in the hopes that they would grow close again.

You need to proofread your story, though. I saw a lot of missing punctation throughout the prologue such as periods and commas. Also, some of your sentences seem to be off tense wise.

'The only thing I’ve had done has seeing my campus, it was gorgeous, like fucking gorgeous!'

Your words are a bit mixed up there and I caught that same mistake again a little later on.

Also, in some things you keep adding commas to sentences to make them longer, but in some parts I don't really think it's necessary. This part:

'Soon he barely called me, he barely said he loved me and soon he barely even cared for me, Kayla had to go back to Cali, because her classes were about to start.' That part about Kayla doesn't really seem to fit with that sentence as the subjects are totally different. You could either use a semi-colon or make it into a new sentence.

Sorry for the nitpicking. I'm not trying to make you feel bad. I think you do have a good story concept going on with Jimmy growing apart and being unfaitful and Gaby trying to move on, but I think you need to proofread your chapters before you post them. They may seem like small errors but they build up over time and it can distract the reader from your story if they are constantly picking out things that are either not there or not supposed to be there. Glad to see it's a sequel also. I can barely get to chapter two so kudos to you! (Pardon my rhyming.)

Okay i really hate Violet loll Jimmy what the hell?! Haha Oh Gosh poor Gaby! This gonna be better right? Pwease lol Arg I hope so I really don't like this thing called jimmy's girlfriend loll

update soon

Jimmy's girlfriend needs to scoot.

No, no killing.. How would you write this if you were dead? Maybe a bit of light toeture in worse case scenario.. Hmmm... Good chapter.

IT BETTER GOT BETTER OR WE IS GOING TO FIGHT

WHY DOES JIMMY HAVE A GIRLFRIEND AHHH

I WOULD TOTALLY KILL YOU BUT I LOVE YOU AND I'D MISS MY WIFEY TOO MUCH!!!! SO UPDATE BITCH... AS SOON AS YOU CAN!!! AND I WANT IT TO BE IN JIMMY'S POV SO BAD!!! I WANT TO BE INSIDE HIS HEADDDDDDDD!!!!!!!!!

:) yay. Lol can't wait to read more!

God, I hope they get back together. the suspense is killing me!

Jimmy's hole just keeps getting deeper and deeper. I can't believe he has a girlfriend. Poor Gabby : (