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  • Justified Sundays

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    Oh wow. This is... so fucking awesome. I love the realistic dialogue. I could really see what was happening, and that's what makes me love you more as a writer. And the fact that you love Supernatural is why I love you more as a person, now. lmfao XD
    September 27th, 2012 at 04:11am
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    Cool. WINCEST TIME!!!
    September 27th, 2012 at 02:24am
  • discoveringclouds

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    I haven't watched this Supernatural, but this writing is really interesting. I like your story. It's a bit insane, but I kind of imagine this is how my brother feels when he wants to get a nice scar and speed around on the highway. Also, I just heard a car breaking hard outside and skidding while I read this. I didn't hear anything after,so it should be fine.

    You might want to take out the swearing. For me, swearing in a story throws me completely out of reading mode.

    Maybe there's more you should hint at, like why he can't stop,is it speed? So why doesn't he go run around too? :P
    September 27th, 2012 at 02:19am
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