That Place - Comments

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So, right away, I can already tell that you're a good writer. Your descriptions are lovely, I must say. But, you sort of put a bunch of stuff all into one sentence. It's a little distracting, and doesn't allow for me to focus on stuff one at a time. Also, the font that you use makes it difficult for me to focus on your writing as well, but I think that's just me :c Maybe you can try darkening the font? Or adding colour to the background of your layout? Anyways, this seems like a good story and I hope you do get your A for your writing class ehe c:

I had a giant pine tree fall beside my house as well. I also lost power and internet for five days and I swear it was hell. But I'm glad everything is going well for you and nothing too serious happened.

Hmmm maybe it's been so long since I read the other chapters if you said it there, but what's so terrible about Juno's home? And how did Micah know?

yay update!

Through a Glass Darkly by Karleen Koen? :3

I would bet you're getting an A, this is really great writing! I don't really know where it's going yet so I can't comment on that but I love your writing style. A lot of people really screw it up and describe too much or too little or don't add enough dialouge but you had a nice contrast. Good job and I hope you keep updating. :)

I really like this story!
More please!

I like this idea for a story and its really well written. I'm positive you will get that +A.

Hello! I'm your only subscriber? I would have thought there were more... Oh well! It's good so far. Interesting twist on a kidnapp story. Keep it up :)