Hello,[this is about Baby, I'm All The Morphine You'll Ever Need]
I really liked this, you really expressed what the characters were feeling very well without it being like sickeningly dramatic. There was just the right amount of emotion and it wasnt over done. At the end when he said "baby, im all the morphine you'll ever need." i was like awwwww.
It was definately a very sweet, cute, and romantic one shot.
I felt like there could have been a little more description as supposed to dialogue though you did the dialogue very well. In a lot of these types of stories people tend to make it far to mushy gushy for my taste but that wasnt the case at all with this one, and for that I commend you.
Another small thing I didnt like was all the time skips, but thats just one of my pet peeves.
Overall I really liked it, i felt an attachment to your characters that I find hard to develope in one shots. I know I have a huge problem with doing it anyway lol
Hi, I'm one of the judges for the Pre-write contest. I liked the plot of the story I thought it was nice and easy to follow, it also had the right mout of sadness in it, it didn't feel over dramatic which is really good.
The only real problems I have is how little description there is, you don't go into any particular detail aout anyone or anything, or when it seems your about to your already onto a different part of the story, I think detail is the most important in a story and I think it makes the story seem less imaginative without enough of it.
Grammar was quite good and so was the story overall, I liked it.:)
I'm a judge for the Pre-write contest. I think Appreciate matched the lyrics the best. You did a real nice job there. I also liked in the other two you submitted for judging that you keep Alyssa as a character. I like how these read as if we were looking at a photo and watching a video, just getting bits and pieces of the character's life. Also, the retelling of Romeo and Juliet in From The Garden to Forever was cute. I liked the ball for that reason and because I could very easily picture Brendon Urie attending something like that. Nice work.
So, my first comment was for Appreciate, my second one was for My Own Little Piece of Heaven, and this one is for From the Garden to Forever. I loved it. It was beautiful, and I have to say Taylor Swift's song Love Story is a wonderful song. Keep up the great work. I didn't see anything wrong with this one at all.
I'm a judge for the Pre-write contest by The Doctor. First off I have to say that this song-fic one shot was absolutely beautiful. It was well written and very well constructed. I didn't find any errors. I also have to say that it was a sad story, but as you said in your author's note it is all true. Life is too short and everyone does need to appreciate everything they are given and not take them for granted. Keep up your writing because it is wonderful!
OMG!!! That was like super frickin' amazing!!! I loved it!! You know since I had to delete your one-shot I totally owe you another one. I'll write it and then post it when I can, babe. I promise!!!
Hello! Guess who doesn't know why she's commenting your story when she could be commenting your page? Me is!! I lurve your stories though so maybe that's why. Lol.